Yesterday my brother, my sister and I were going for an afternoon stroll in the park. Suddenly a red squirrel came out in front of us and kept on jumping up and down so I decided to bend my knees and bow down to the interesting creature. I looked into its little beady brown eyes as it stopped nibbling its acorn, I whispered “hey little fella, what’s the matter on your tiny little mind” It just looked at me shocked as a child looking at all their Christmas presents, and then I saw a bright light.?
Well done on your entry Darcy. Some great word choices.
Miss Pallister
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Miss P
we are all very proud of you Darcy
Great writing, Darcy.
A really nice idea, well executed with some clever details. I’m not sure that the prompt fits but, other than that, very good.
Keep up the good work!
Definitely a cliffhanger
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Darcy,
An excellent story.
You’ve used lots of descriptive words which helps the reader create an image of the park and the squirrel. Especially the “shocked as a child looking at all their Christmas presents”
Well done a great read.
Thank you for everyone’s comments i really appreciate them, i will take in the comments and maybe write another one.
THAT WAS GREAT DARCY! I love your vocabulary
I think so to Asher
I like red squirrels and their was lots of vocabulary well done Darcy
Wow, what a great piece of writing Darcy.
Have a look at the children who have been showcased in the 100 word challenge for last week Darcy. I think you will be pleased! 100.wc.net
Miss Pallister
I love your thinking! And squirrels are so cute!
Well done Darcy!
great writing
this is some really gripping writing, it makes me want to know what that light was. maybe you could do another part to it next 100wc?
Maggie
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Well done Darcy, I think it was very good. My favourite part was the descriptions.
I think it was really good Darcy some great descriptions that were very funny.
This was a really imaginative sentence.
wow Darcy ,that was an ace story ,you are such a good writer.
Its really cool Darcy. i like squirrels they’re cute and it definitely sounded like that squirrel was cute on how you described it!!!!
Well done Darcy.
I liked your description.